The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

The two maps give information about how people get to a city hospital in two years, 2017 and 2010.

Overall

, the

road

has undergone changes,

such

as an expanded car park and a special place for buses. In 2007, there were several bus stops on two sides of Hospital Street,but, in 2010 these small bus stops were removed and there was constructed bigger special place for public transport on the left side of the

road

Also

, the old

road

access had one place for parking for staff and the public, later there built different parking for each of them.Car parking for patients was built on the east side of the city hospital and the old car park was converted into parking for employers. Another striking change was the construction of the roundabout, which can be found in the front of the city hospital.The one thing that remained the same

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road

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4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Nowadays an increasing numbers of profession such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can done to solve this.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?