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Writing task 1: Write atleast 150 words and spend no more than 20 minutes on this task. You are new to the city and you would like to take your family out for a meal. Write a letter to your friend who is familiar with the city. In your letter: • Tell him or her about the occasion • Tell him or her about what kind of a restaurant you prefer • Ask him suitable recommendations Start with Dear..............,

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Dear Tony, I hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and well. I am writing
this
 letter to get suggestions about a suitable
restaurant
 in
this
city
 as I have planned to go out for a meal with my family members. First and foremost, I wanted to let you know about the occasion which I
have
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planned
few
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a few
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 days back. As you know, recently I have moved to
this
 new
city
 permanently from Bangladesh. As a part of celebrating
this
 achievement, I have decided to
offering
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 a dinner party in a
restaurant
 so that me and my family members can cope
up
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with the new culture of
this
 new
city
. Since you have been staying in
this
city
 for a long time, I firmly believe that you have a good idea about the good
restaurant
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 around
this
city
. As people from the subcontinent, we
prefered
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preferred
 those restaurants
who
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that
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provides
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Bangali
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Bengali
 food items, especially rice, fish,
and
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smashed potato etc. It seems to me that you are the right person to suggest
us
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 a
restaurant
 where
contental
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continental
content
 foods are available
as well as
 the
overall
 environment is
family friendly
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.
In addition
, you are
also
 cordially invited
in
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this
 dinner party. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon regarding
this
 matter. Yours lovingly, Faisal
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a single clear idea. The second paragraph is slightly unfocused, with both the occasion and a brief introduction to the move being mentioned.
coherence cohesion
Make certain the introduction is concise and directly addresses the purpose of the letter.
task achievement
Aim for a more precise articulation of the request in the body of the letter. The third paragraph could be clearer and more direct regarding the restaurant preferences.
task achievement
Utilize a consistent formal style. The closing phrase 'Yours lovingly' is more suited for intimate correspondence, whereas 'Yours sincerely' or 'Best regards' would be more appropriate in this context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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