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the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015
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The combination of bar and table chart illustrates the
value
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 of export earnings in five different categories during 2015 and 2016 and the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015 respectively.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the largest number of
goods
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 were exported in the second
year
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 as compared with the initial
year
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,
while
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 the
value
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 of textiles was the highest in exports.
According to
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 the given data, in 2016 petroleum products and engineered
goods
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 were similar at nearly 60
billion
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dollars
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. Meanwhile, there was a difference of just 2
billion
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dollars
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 between both
goods
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 in the
year
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 2015.
Furthermore
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, the
value
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 of gems and jewellery has been showing an increment of almost 1
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016.
Also
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, the
value
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 of
agriculture
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 items represents a significant rise in 2016 as compared to 2015.
Lastly
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, textile products were exported at nearly 28
billion
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dollars
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 in the first
year
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. Moving
further
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, textile
goods
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 have the highest proportion of 15.24%.
Thus
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, the
value
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 of petroleum products has increased by 3%.
Moreover
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, the
value
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 of engineered
goods
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, gems and jewellery was 8.5%
as well as
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 5.18% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, goods, year, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports, categories, value, goods, services
  • Trends, increase, decrease, percentage, compared
  • Significant, minimal, fluctuation, remained stable
  • Domestic product, international trade, economic indicators
  • Manufacturing, agriculture, technology, textiles
  • Revenue, economic growth, trade deficit
  • Forecast, predict, anticipate, implications
  • Global market, exchange rate, competitiveness
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