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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because the will able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspaper #books
It has been argued that there will be a decreasing trend in buying the hardcopy of
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 or
books
 because
the
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 presence of online
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resources
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 that do not need any cost to
access
. I do agree with
such
 an argument because of two primary reasons, that
the
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online
books
offers
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 easier
access
 compared to physical
books
 and the unlimited amount of
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 available
in
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The online
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books
 have the most prominent factor
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it is offering
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they offer
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 the
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access
 for anyone
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anytime and anywhere. Other than that, the online resources
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 more simple and convenient
while
 the readers still have the equal content as they read hardcopy
books
. The progress of technology has
also
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 to
this
 concern,
tablet
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tablets
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 and
smartphone
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smartphones
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 have increased the good user experience in digital reading.
For instance
, after
COVID-19
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 pandemic, the
numbers
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 of website readers have
rised
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risen
raised
 significantly.
On the other hand
, there
are
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 abundant
of
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free
contents
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content
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 available
in
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on
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 the internet nowadays. The position of
books
 now have been replaced with any kind of resources available online
such
 as website articles, social media, daily news
app
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apps
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, video platform sharing, and many more.
Moreover
, the power of social media
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 encouraged people to share their opinion and point of view
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 their platform and it leads to
the
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more
of
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contents
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shared
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 every single second. To illustrate, the presence of YouTube has helped many people in the world to
access
 and learn everything without any cost at all.
To conclude
, the trend of buying
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newspapers
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 and printed
books
 will decrease in the future
due to
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the
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online
books
 need no cost to
access
 and I do agree with
such
 an argument because
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of
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the
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online
books
 offer easier
access
 and
the
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unlimited
resource
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resources
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 available
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on
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in
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on
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 the internet nowadays.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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