The diagram below shows the water supply system in Australia at present and in the future.

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that

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how

australia

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Australia

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supplies

water

at present and future plans by three types of

water

such

as pure

water

storm

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stormwater

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water

and

waste

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wastewater

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water

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from the perspective, at present

waste

water

connect

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the

river

but in

future

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the future

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waste

water

will be purified by the

water

treatment

plant

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diagrams show that

present

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the present

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connection starts with

dam

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the dam

a dam

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, pure

water

is satisfied

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satisfies

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the

water

needs

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four main factors

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city, factories,

household

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households

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and shops. These four

factor's

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factors

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waster

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water

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water

and

storm

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stormwater

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water

are

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mixed into the

water

treatment

plant

and

river

respectively.

Waste

water

is connected to the

river

from the

water

treatment

plant

. In future plans of the

water

supply

system

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system,

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everything will be the same as present but the

storm

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stormwater

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water

ans

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and

waste

water

will not be mixed into the

river

besides

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it will be mixed into the

water

treatment

plant

then

water

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the water

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will be purified to pure

water

then

people could

be use

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it.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, waste, river, treatment, plant with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 4 times.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

163 words

6.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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