Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

It is claimed that some occupations which are similar for all
countries
with standard functions (like doctors, teachers, engineers
ect
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etc
) can
work
in any place they want. Others consider that because
of
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many reasons
such
professionals should
work
in only one
country
where they get
education
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.
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opinion allows professionals to move to another
country
. I agree with
this
opinion, as in the modern world nobody can restrict moving to another place and
work
there. The main
factor
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for considering people to
work
should be education, qualification and motivation to
work
, but not nationality and
country
they come from.
Otherwise
, it would be discrimination,
that
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is not normal
especially
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for democratic
countries
,
such
as Norway, Canada, Finland and so on.
Moreover
,
such
movements allow the development of certain spheres in different
countries
, because people can bring new knowledge, technologies and experience from more-developed
countries
to less-developed ones.
However
, all
countries
may have different medical systems and rules that regulate certain spheres in a
country
.
Hence
, the government can require passing additional exams from candidates from other
countries
.
For example
, the USA has
such
a system, in order to become a doctor in America a person should learn again even if they got an education in their
countries
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. In conclusion, I would like to say that governments should not make restrictions which do not allow people to move and
work
abroad.
Moreover
,
such
moves can give many benefits to
countries
’ development. At the same time, if the government of a certain
country
considers professionals from other places should know some rules, which are important for working,
then
workers should learn all necessary and pass required exams.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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