Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is widely believed that
art
is a global language to express human feelings or hindsight without the need for any interpretation.
Music
as a kind of
art
follows
this
rule and nowadays becomes one of the most important ways of integrating various cultures. Thanks to the advancement of technology and the Internet, we can see serious cultural globalisation in the
music
industry.
It is clear that
every
music
contains
of
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lyrics and rhythms,
although
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the content can be difficult to understand in different languages, the audience always can enjoy the melody and by listening to various cultures' productions they will have the opportunity to know a wide range of local instruments.
For instance
, in Iran, there is an instrument which is called "Se-Tar" and traditional Persian
music
usually uses it in their performances. If you don't know Persian, you still can recognise the identity of the
music
by knowing the "Se-Tar". To build upon my point a little more,
music
can be engaged with dance and performance
art
which can appeal to audiences as an integral part of the event.
For instance
, strange ones in concerts build a new short-time relationship during their dance and sing together as a fandom of the specific singer.
In addition
, in musical performance
art
sometimes the visitors should participate in it to accomplish the artwork with the artist. All of these examples can make strong bonds between people regardless of their ages, ethnicity and so on thanks to the power of
music
. To put it in a nutshell, I strongly believe that
music
as an
art
has the power to gather people together and they can immerse themselves in different societies regardless of their mother tongue and so on.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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