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Nowadays,learning a foreign language is essential in the modern education system. While others think it is not beneficial to teach young children a foreign language as the benefits of it are uncertain. Some people strongly believe that it has more advantages than the disadvantages.

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Nowadays,learning a foreign
language
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 is essential in the modern education system.
While
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 others think it is not beneficial to teach young
children
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 a foreign
language
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 as the benefits of it are uncertain. Some people strongly believe that it has more advantages than the disadvantages. To start with,
language
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 skills are built over years and require a lot of practice. If a child is in elementary
school
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, he can learn a new
language
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, and as he grows, he will master it better. Young
children
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 are good at
languages
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. As you get older, your ability to learn a new
language
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 decreases.
In addition
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,on the negative side, some pupils at primary
school
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 may get confused by learning both native
language
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 and foreign
language
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. They may not
sure
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 whether some words are used properly in
native
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their native
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language
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 or second
language
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 and they may mix both two
languages
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 in their formal speaking and writing, which may result in criticism from other people.
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, they often cannot learn both
languages
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 well.
On the other hand
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, there are some downsides too. The main disadvantage of learning a second
language
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 at primary
school
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 is that it is an additional burden for the student.
This
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 is particularly true if reading and writing are
also
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 taught. Young
children
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 should have plenty of time to play and if they are taught too many subjects at
school
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, it can be stressful for them.
To conclude
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, each child perceives in a special way and gets used to himself in mastering two
languages
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.
Furthermore
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,
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 is an important advantage that benefits career growth and young
children
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 are adept at learning new
languages
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.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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