The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.
These pie charts illustrate the differences
of
time Change preposition
in
spending
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spent
for
Change preposition
by
the
workers in a certain Correct article usage
apply
countrey
between 1958 Correct your spelling
country
to
2008.
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and
It is clear that
the ratio of working and relaxing at home had a significant increase, in contrast
, the percentage of sleeping and going out with friends/family dropped in 2008.
In the first year, 33% of the people spent their time on
working, more workers focused on their job after 5 years, the number increased to 42%. Change preposition
apply
Similiarly
, relaxing at home might be a better choice for Correct your spelling
Similarly
the
people in 2008, it was 13%. Correct article usage
apply
While comparing
with the Wrong verb form
Compared
former
year, it had a 5% growth.
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previous
However
, the percentage of sleeping dropped from 32% to 25%, which means less
people prefer to have a rest in their spare time. Going out with friends/family Change the quantifier
fewer
also
had the same trend, the number was 19% in 1958, nevertheless
, it became 6% in 2008, which is less than one-third of the former year.Submitted by chaoweikevin on
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