Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

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Science

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a significant impact on our society, either the communication system or the daily supply,

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as water and electricity, are all included in

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field.

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, recently,

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students

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choose

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science

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as their major in university. Personally, I think it

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several reasons which cause

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situation, the following content will list them. These days, there are more options and subjects for

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to pick in

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university

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major in

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science related

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subjects. I think it could be a positive sign for the employment rate in the future.

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, in the past, there were plenty of graduates

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science related

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occupation

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, it was competitive and it was hard for some graduates to find a

job

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, various subjects in

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mean there will

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more types of

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positions in

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society,

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and more

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job

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opportunnities

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opportunities

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after

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graduate.

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, more

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artistic

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for artistic

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and cultural

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rather than

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substantial

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science

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and

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physics

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. In the

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decades,

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governments and educational institutions have published the magnitude of art and culture,

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, there were more industries successfully developed in our community.

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, the industries of tourism and art became more important to our

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, they became not only a critical part of the national income but

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a way of sharing the knowledge of the unique

cuture

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culture

and sense of beauty in our nation. In conclusion, I think it could have a positive impact on the country when

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people choose

science

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as their major, it could increase the variation of

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job

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opportunnity

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opportunities

which can reduce the competition

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the

job

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market and promote our nation in

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entertaining way.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure a logical progression of ideas throughout the essay by efficiently linking paragraphs and employing cohesive devices. Introduction should clearly outline the topic, while the conclusion should summarize the main points without introducing new information.

task achievement

Task response should reflect a clear understanding of the prompt. Make sure each paragraph conveys a clear main idea, properly elaborated with explanations and examples. Reflect on the prompt's questions by providing in-depth analysis and a range of ideas related to the causes of the issue and its consequences on society.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

289 words

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opportunities
role models
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employment
gender stereotypes
societal norms
access to information
technological stagnation
shortage
skilled professionals
innovation
healthcare sector
workforce
global competitiveness
advancements
economic growth
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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

Your opinion

Giving detailed information of crime in newspapers and on television has bad consequences. Some suggest that government should impose some restriction on them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people believe that life in a large city is becoming more and more arduous, while the life in villages is much more beneficial. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?