Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles others think there are other better ways . Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Safety
is an important thing to consider
while
driving vehicles on the
road
. Some people believe that
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the maximum speed limits can increase
safety
. Some others argue that there are
another
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practices that
more
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are more
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effective.
While
some people argue that
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the speed limits can improve
road
safety
, I side with those who feel that other ways are more optimal. On the one hand, it can
be argue
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that reducing maximum speed limits
while
driving on the
road
may improve
safety
because it can pose two
some
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challenges.
Firstly
,
by
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making rules on the side of
road
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the road
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by
build
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a warning sign with
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a lower
the lower
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number of
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maximum speed
not
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is not
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effective
to make
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in making
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the
drivers
obey.
Secondly
,
this
rule may not
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for people who are under the influence
of
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or
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drunk, they cannot
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be aware
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with
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any other
drivers
or any
road
sign
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.
Last
, an accident still can
be occurred
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occur
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if the
drivers
not
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do not
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have
an
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adequate
skill
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to drive.
On the other hand
,
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believe with those who think that there
are
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another approach that
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more better for two main reasons.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
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could make
a
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strict regulations and
selective for
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select
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citizen
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citizens
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who
able
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to have driving
license
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licenses
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and
driving
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drive
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vehicles.
Secondly
,
government
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the government
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can consider
to collaborate
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with police to do
regular
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or
periodically
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monitoring
the
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of the
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drivers
on the
road
and give a high number of
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if they do any dangerous driving
behavior
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. In
conclusions
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,
while
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the speed on the
road
may increase
road
safety
, it cannot run effectively.
Therefore
, on balance, I remain firmly convinced that
the
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another
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other
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method like
make
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a
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apply
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strict rules and more frequent monitoring
the
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of the
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road
are more well run.
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