The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
There has been much debate going on if budget airlines bring more benefits or harm. Some people support the idea of
low budget
airlines, Add a hyphen
low-budget
however
some say it has a lot of disadvantages/drawbacks. In Add a comma
however,
this
essay
I will discuss both views and present my opinion.
One positive aspect of Add a comma
essay,
this
development is increased accessibility of travel for less affluent citizens. In the past, it was mainly reserved for the wealthy and the middle class who could travel by plane. But now, people who have a more limited budget can afford buying
flight tickets and Change the verb form
to buy
exploring
the world. Wrong verb form
explore
For example
, a round-trip flight from Vilnius to Barcelona can be purchased for as little as 40 euros, making it possible for even students to see the world. Therefore
, it is not only a unique opportunity to save a lot of money, but also
, making
it possible for everybody to visit new places.
Wrong verb form
make
However
, it causes overtourism in certain destinations, as
a result, citizens struggle to cope with the influx of domestic and international tourists leading to concerns about Correct word choice
and as
impact
Add an article
the impact
of
local communities and cultural heritage. Change preposition
on
For instance
, such
cities as Paris, Venice, Vienna
suffer from overcrowding traffic, Correct word choice
and Vienna
long
queues to museums, galleries and cafes or restaurants. Sometimes some countries need to close or limit access to cultural objects in order to save and preserve them.
Correct word choice
and long
To sum up
everything, I believe that low cost
airlines are beneficial for people who want to see the world. It opens opportunities to improve your knowledge about different cultures. Add a hyphen
low-cost
However
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Introduction
Your introduction did a good job setting up the topic, but it could be more effective with a clearer thesis statement expressing your viewpoint.
Conclusion
Try to present a more balanced view by discussing both sides thoroughly before concluding. Your conclusion was not fully stated, remember to sum up your arguments and state your opinion clearly.
Conclusion
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Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas more smoothly throughout your essay. This will enhance the logical flow of your arguments.
Supporting Examples
Provide specific examples for both sides of the argument to strengthen your points. While you provided an example for the positive side, the negative impact needs more concrete examples.
Examples
Included relevant examples to support your argument, especially the low-cost flight example, which illustrates the positive impact of budget airlines.
Structure
The essay successfully introduces the topic and outlines both sides of the argument, making it easy for the reader to follow along.
Coherence
You maintained a mostly coherent discussion, helping the reader to understand your points of view.