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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one universtiy did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one universtiy did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart demonstrates
one
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what one
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 university’s graduating students from
Anthropology
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the Anthropology
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 department did after their graduation.
Also
, the table chart exhibits employed people’s income in five years. All the data is in
proportions
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proportion
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.
Overall
,
the
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apply
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most of the graduated students had
full time
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full-time
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job
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jobs
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. In terms of salaries,
majority
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the majority
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 of freelance consultants and government sector employees gained at least $75,000 same as roughly half of the private company employees did. In detail, 52% of the fresh graduated anthropologists has
full time
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 job
following
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followed
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 by part-time workers with 15% and unemployed graduates with 12%.
Furthermore
, those who did postgraduate study
while
 working part-time and full-time study postgraduate made the minority with 5% and 8%, respectively. Moving on to their salaries, freelance consultants’ 80%
employees
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of employees
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 gained more than 75,000 with the 40% of in it has the highest salary range which is more than $100,000. Workers of
government
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the government
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 sector’ 80% gained more than 75,000
while
 50%
of
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apply
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in
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apply
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it
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apply
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gained more than $100,000.
Finally
, private company workers made a minimum of 75,000 and 0% inside it gained more than $100,000.
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