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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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the line graph shows the
numper
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number
 of
torist
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tourist
tourists
 that
visit
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Europ
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Europe
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 in three different areas ( mountains, coast and lake)
fom
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for
from
 1987 and 2007. It is clear from the graph that the
number
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 of visitors increasing over the
yeas
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years
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 in all areas.
According to
Linking Words
 what is shown, In 1987, the
Correct quantifier usage
number of peopl
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peopl
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people
 who prefer
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visit
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to visit
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 lakes started from 10
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thousands
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thousand
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. After that more and more people
visit
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lake
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the lake
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 during the next 10 years.
Then
Linking Words
, the
number
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 of
visior
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visitors
visitor
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased sharply by 750,00 in 2002, but in the
last
Linking Words
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few years
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years
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years,
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 the
torist
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tourist
 fell steeply around 50
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thousands
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thousand
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.
On the other hand
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, visitor
how
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who
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go
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to go
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 to see
mountians
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mountains
 in 187 has 20,000
mumbers
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members
numbers
.
While
Linking Words
,
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apply
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 other people go to see coast around 90
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thousands
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thousand
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 in same years.
Moerover
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Moreover
, the
number
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 of
visitor
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visitors
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how
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who
show examples
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visit
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to visit
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 the mountains has increased
gradully
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gradually
from
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between
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 1992 and 1997.
Then
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, they remained constant between 1997 and 2002 about 30,00
visitor
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visitors
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.
However
Linking Words
, the
number
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 of people
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visit
Wrong verb form
visiting
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 the coast
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
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decreased slowly by 35
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thousands
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thousand
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 in 1992. After that, they improved until reached
peak
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a peak
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almost
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of almost
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 75,000 in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visit, number, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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