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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #visitors #three #areas #european #country #summarise #information #features #comparisons
the line graph shows the
numper
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number
 of
torist
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tourist
tourists
 that
visit
Europ
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Europe
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 in three different areas ( mountains, coast and lake)
fom
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for
from
 1987 and 2007. It is clear from the graph that the
number
 of visitors increasing over the
yeas
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years
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 in all areas.
According to
 what is shown, In 1987, the
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number of peopl
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peopl
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people
 who prefer
visit
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to visit
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 lakes started from 10
thousands
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thousand
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. After that more and more people
visit
lake
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the lake
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 during the next 10 years.
Then
, the
number
 of
visior
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visitors
visitor
has
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apply
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increased sharply by 750,00 in 2002, but in the
last
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few years
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years
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years,
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 the
torist
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tourist
 fell steeply around 50
thousands
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thousand
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.
On the other hand
, visitor
how
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who
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go
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to go
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 to see
mountians
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mountains
 in 187 has 20,000
mumbers
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members
numbers
.
While
,
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apply
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 other people go to see coast around 90
thousands
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thousand
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 in same years.
Moerover
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Moreover
, the
number
 of
visitor
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visitors
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how
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who
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visit
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to visit
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 the mountains has increased
gradully
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gradually
from
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between
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 1992 and 1997.
Then
, they remained constant between 1997 and 2002 about 30,00
visitor
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visitors
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.
However
, the
number
 of people
visit
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visiting
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 the coast
has
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apply
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decreased slowly by 35
thousands
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thousand
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 in 1992. After that, they improved until reached
peak
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a peak
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almost
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of almost
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 75,000 in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visit, number, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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