Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays,
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become popular and
be
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the
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important part
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the development of a
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.
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providing
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people
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access to visit every
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around the
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whether by land, sea, or air
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.
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also
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a chance for a
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increasing
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export and import activities that affect
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development of a
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. There are many
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of land
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in
this
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world
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, and every
country
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in
this
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world
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have their own popular
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,
for
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example
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trains that
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railways
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to connect every
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and vehicle that
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road
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the road
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to go to
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other places
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place
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, Some
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in
any
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countries in
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world
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have their own ways
to
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developing their countries, and some
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government
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governments
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believe if the
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spend more money
for
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on
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railways
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than
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roads, it might be a good way to develop their countries.
To
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my mind, The main reason for
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action
are
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the
government
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want to give their
people
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convenience,
efficient
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and less cost
while
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visiting
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other places
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place
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in their
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.
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, spending money on
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can affect to economic
values
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value
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of a
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, and stabilize the cost of food, or
another things
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that
people
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need for daily use because
,
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the supply
of
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can
be send
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to another
place
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with
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shorter
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a shorter
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time than using
the
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roads
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road
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transportation
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.
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, based on the actual data,
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railways
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transportation
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be the safest land
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with less number of accident than road
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. In conclusion, the
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should spend more money
for
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on
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railway
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railways
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because
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railways
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railway
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transportation
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,
giving
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gives
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people
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ways to
connecting
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connect from
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place
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to
place
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with a lot of
benefit
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benefits
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, with zero
accident
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accidents
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,
good
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and good
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for increasing
economic
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the economic
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values
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value
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of a
country
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