The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed
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The table and chart illustrate the police funding in two years between 2017 and 2018 in a specific area of Britain. The table displays the money sources
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the charts give information about the distribution of the money. In general, most of the budget tended to
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by the National Government, followed by Local Taxes and Other Sources, and the largest of the money was distributed to spend on buildings and transportation. In 2017, the highest funding was National Government, at £ 175.5
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figure increased slightly to £ 177.8
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in 2018 which was over fourth-fold than Other Sources in the same years. Compared to Local Taxes, the budget had a significant increase of around £ 11
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, starting from £ 91.2
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in 2017 to £ 102.3
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in 2018. One of the prominent features in the two pie charts is that,
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of the funding
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on buildings and transport, just under one-ten of that was used for officers and staff salaries in 2017. One year later the percentage of Salaries (officers and staff) grew by 6% to 14%.
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