The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares the proportion of various groups of Australian
males
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and
females
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who did physical activity regularly in 2010.
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, women were more likely to exercise than men in Australia, though the
percentage
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of men between 15 to 24 years old was higher than women. It can be seen that
females
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aged from 25 to 64 represented
significantly
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higher
percentage
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than
males
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in the same range of
age
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group. In the
age
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group of 15 to 24, men account for 52.8%
while
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the
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of women
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physical activity was 47.7%.
Males
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did exercise in the following
age
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groups represented 42.2% in 24-34, 39.5% in 35-44, 43.1% in 45-54 and 45.1% in 55-64, respectively.
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, the figure for
males
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was slightly lower than that for
females
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, which was 46.7%, only lower than
females
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at 0.4%.
Females
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did much more physical activity between the ages of 25 and 64, and the gap between the two genders is particularly obvious in the
age
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group of 35 to 44 - the
percentage
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of
females
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was 52.5% which was higher than that of
males
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around 13%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, percentage, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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