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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 6.0

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 6.0
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The bar chart illustrates how many
passengers
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 used the three major airports in New York City from 1995 to 2000. Units are measured in millions of
passengers
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.
Overall
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, there was an increasing trend of visitors at LaGuardia and Newark airports,
while
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 the
number
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 of travellers using John F. Kennedy
Airport
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 fluctuated. Throughout the time period, LaGuardia was the most busy
airport
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 except in 1997. It had 35
million
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passengers
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 at the start, and experienced a steady increase for four years,
then
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 grew dramatically in the
last
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 year, which ended with around double the original
number
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.
In addition
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, Newark
Airport
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also
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 had an
overall
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 increase in travellers over the five years. It first started at around 15
million
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passengers
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,
then
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 increased to around 40
million
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 visitors in 2000, making it the least-used
airport
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 in the end.
On the other hand
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, there was a floating trend for the
number
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 of
passengers
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 using John F. Kennedy
Airport
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. It first had around 25
million
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 travellers in 1995,
then
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 it fluctuated between 30 to 50
million
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 people for the next five years. In the end, it ended with around 45
million
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 visitors, which is slightly higher than the
number
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 in Newark, making it the second
most busy
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busiest
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airport
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 in New York City.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, number, airport, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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