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Surveys show that many people believe most jobs in the future will be done at home.Do you agree or disagree ?

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In recent years, there have been numerous people
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who prefered
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prefered
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prefer
 to spend their
work
 from home. As
such
, there are agreements and disagreements in
comunities
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communities
,
although
 I opine
thats
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that
 the agreements outweigh the disagreements. I agree that it would
be optimized
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 our working performance
,
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apply
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 if we do it from home. In
this
 essay, I will examine all the relevant arguments based on factual premises. Nowadays, time is the most important factor in a person's life. A person can save a
lot
 of time from travelling and preparations from their home to
workplace
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the workplace
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.
In addition
, numerous hassles
such
 as driving and travelling through public transportation will be reduced. It will comfort human life.
Due to
this
, people will have a
lot
 of time to spend with their loved ones.
For example
. as per data released by the government, numerous people are enjoying
to
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working
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work
 from their homes which has
boost
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boosted
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 their
work
 performance. On the companies side, they gain a
lot
 of
beneficials
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benefits
 from remote workers because they do not have to spend money to manage their employees in the offices.
For example
, the employer does need to spend money on food and water for their workers.
Moreover
, they obtain a
lot
 of profits because of excellent performance from their employees. Nowadays, the employer can save money because they do not rent a place. In conclusion, there are numerous merits
from
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of
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 remote
work
 for employers and employees.
This
 essay suggests companies
to
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apply
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adopt
this
 method because of
beneficial
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its beneficial
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 impacts to
all-around
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all around
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 society.
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