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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinions?

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Music
 plays an essential role in our everyday life. We listen to
music
 every day and even sometimes do not realize it. There are many resources where we can listen to
music
. We listen to the radio
while
 driving our cars. We turn on the TV and watch movies where
music
 influences our
mind
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 and makes
people
 tremble at the fear. For several reasons, which I will mention below, I believe that
music
 is a good way to bring
people
 of different cultures and ages together. So
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music
 is important to humankind. First of all,
music
 is one of the best ways to relax after a stressful day. Many
people
 prefer to listen to
music
 in the evening.
For example
 , I like
listen
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 to pop
music
. I have
listened
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 songs by famous international or national singers. Second of all,
music
 often helps
people
 to cheer up. Personally, when something is bothering me, I prefer to turn on my radio and listen to some of my favourite songs. It helps me to feel better about everything. Leave my troubles behind and enjoy my life. Nowadays,
people
 gather and listen to
music
 around a concert. I am sure that many
peoplewill
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people will
 agree with me on
this
 issue.
Finally
 ,
music
 plays an essential role in different ceremonies.
For example
, I think it is rather difficult to imagine a wedding without solemn
music
 or the Olympic Games without anthems. In conclusion, I think that
music
 is a unique language, which is understood by everyone all over the planet.
Music
 is a great way of bringing
people
 of different cultures and ages together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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