The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar diagram represents the developing countries and
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
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pollution
level
also
the bars in the chart differ and
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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the causes
for
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of
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pollution
. (electricity
genereation
Correct your spelling
generation
, Transport, Industry)
While
China
produce
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produces
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nearly 60% of
pollution
by transport, no other
countries
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country
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produces like that.
Australia
produces very
less
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little
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pollution
.
China
produced industrious
pollution
nearly two times more than Japan and four times more than
Australia
Japan managed to have the least
PPM
amount given in the charts less than one-third of
China
's 60
PPM
for electricity generation. Japan's
PPM
levels by transport equals
to
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apply
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the
PPM
level
of America's electrical and industrial cause.
Australia
's
PPM
level
is lesser than all other
countries
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countries'
country's
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PPM
level
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levels
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.
Whereas
, America's transportation factor is nearly as much as
China
's electricity at about 60
PPM
. To summarize, at the bottom of the data
Australia
's whole
pollution
is less than a third of
China
which is the biggest polluter with
pollution
rounding of about 250PPM total.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pollution, level, china, australia, ppm with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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