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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the layout of a central library
shows
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 us the changes during the 20-year period.
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,
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 the given data, it is evident that the number of facilities increased
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 some replacements. First of all, we can mention the main hall and its changes, name as removing the social tables in the middle of the hallway and adding some self-service machines on the right side of the hall. Moving
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, all adult
books
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 including fiction and non-fiction
books
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 were established on the right side and reference
books
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 were added on the second turn on the left side from the entrance.
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, moving on to the changes in each
room
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, the enquiry desk was removed and replaced by a
caffe
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cafe
 in the right corner.
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Moreover
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 the children’s
books
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room
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 was replaced with a cd and the computer
room
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 and
previous
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the previous
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 place of it became a lecture
room
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however
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 the computer
room
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 did not get removed from the map it only moved a little below, first turn on the left from the entrance. There is
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 a change in the size of the second area on the left which now become a place for storytelling and children's
books
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To sum up
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, the difference between
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to
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two
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 maps is in details with updating facilities.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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