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The maps illustrate changes to Colwick Arts Centre between 2005 and the present day. Describe the changes.

The maps illustrate changes to Colwick Arts Centre between 2005 and the present day. Describe the changes.
The two maps illustrate changes
of
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 the Colwick Arts
Centre
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 between 2005 and today. It is obvious that during
this
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 period the Colwick
Centre
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 made many changes including new buildings and relocating some places. In the past, the snack bar was in the top left-hand corner of the
Centre
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,
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 now the meeting rooms are there.
Concert
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The concert
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 hall and cinema were relocated
in
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 the
center
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centre
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 but now are divided, and
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addition
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 they increased in size. The two gallery buildings became one and moved to the far left of the
Centre
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. The Arts
Centre
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 created
drama
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a drama
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 studio and central exhibition area which in order are located in the top left and the
center
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 of the precinct. The café is developed next to the gallery building and the toilet is moved
at
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 the side of the concert hall. On the wasteland, a stage is built, the outdoor exhibition and performance area is close to the stage and trees were planted around it. So, we can see that the facility changed and expanded during
this
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 time.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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