Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying get a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion
Universities offer two types of courses, those which focus on one main subject, and those that offer additional subjects. Student choices are dependent on their life goals.
This
essay will explain the rationale for student choices and make a case for the most suitable of the two.
Firstly
, in regard to studying subjects in addition
to the main one, students find this
a more advantageous course of action as it opens doors to a variety of employment opportunities. For example
, if a student studies for a bachelor's degree in Maths, Physics and Chemistry, they are eligible to land a job in the software industry, as well as
in the other sectors. Hence
, there is an undebatable advantage to becoming proficient in several subjects.
On the other hand
, if a person aims to specialise in a subject at University, they have the upper hand when trying to make a career in their chosen field of work. For instance
, if a person wants to become a physicist, it is imperative for them to study as many aspects of physics as they can in their university courses to obtain a coveted position in a reputed scientific institute. While
this
perspective is also
valid, very few individuals in a population have such
specific vocational inclinations. Most people instead
are not very choosy and are just looking for a paying job and hence
, opting for a general course of studies is preferred.
In conclusion, while
universities do well to offer both specialised and general programs of study, the latter are found to be more popular because they lead to many more job prospects. I agree with this
perspective as it is important to cater to the masses, even though there might be a few outliers who are intent on qualifying in a specialist area.Submitted by Leena Kapoor on
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coherence cohesion
Although your essay introduced the topic and followed a logical structure, it needs further refinement. Your introduction should more clearly introduce the discussion points. In the body, transitions between ideas could be smoother, and each point could be further developed. Concluding remarks summarized the essay but lacked a strong, personal viewpoint on the topic. Strive for more sophisticated paragraphing and more varied connective devices.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt but fails to fully develop both viewpoints before stating your opinion. It might benefit from more concrete examples and a deeper exploration of the reasons behind students' choices for their type of study. Additionally, your opinion should be woven throughout the essay rather than just presented at the end. Make sure to address all parts of the task equally and offer a balanced discussion before providing a clear opinion.
Your opinion
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