The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart data above presents a comparison between family income and expenses in 1968 and 2018. The most striking data in the chart concerns food expenditure. In 1968, many
families
spent the majority of their income on buying food,
while
in 2018, there was a significant decrease in spending on food. In 1968,
families
spent less on home and leisure activities, which was inversely proportional to their focus on work.
This
could explain why their expenditure on
such
activities was relatively low. The chart comparing the expenditure of
families
in 1968 and 2018 shows that the latter spends significantly more on household needs and leisure activities.
This
suggests that
families
in 2018
prioritize
Wrong verb form
prioritised
show examples
leisure and personal enjoyment over work, which was not the case in 1968. And
finally
what is striking is the data in the household goods section. Since 1968 and 2018 there has been no difference in the level of spending by
families
on household goods.
Submitted by sidneynatasha16 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • proportion
  • weekly income
  • accounted for
  • total expenditure
  • housing and utility expenses
  • transportation costs
  • other expenses
  • education
  • healthcare
  • leisure activities
  • spending patterns
  • witnessed a considerable rise
  • experienced a substantial increase
  • allocating a larger proportion
  • reducing their expenditure
What to do next:
Look at other essays: