The table shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time

The table shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time
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The line graph gives information on the obesity
rate
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in one country by
age
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from 18 to 74
years
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old over 24
years
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.
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, there was an upward trend of obesity
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for every
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over the timeframe. Units are measured in
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. The
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groups of 45-64 and 65-74 experienced a similar pattern through the
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. Starting at the same point about 17,5% in 1971, these figures experienced a rapid growth
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to above 35% in 1999. From that period the obesity
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for these two groups remained constant at approximately 35%.
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between 2003 and 2005, the 45-64
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group
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rose to around 41%, with the 65-74
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group
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indicating no significant difference to the latter. Interestingly, the
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18-29 and 30-44 were the categories with the lowest
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of overweight for the following
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. Starting just under 9% and 15% respectively, these figures fluctuated and increased significantly to around 21% and 30% in 1999. From
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point, the 18-29
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group
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remained stable contribution at 24% by 2005,
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the 30-44 got a moderate increase to 35% in 2003 and
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steady at that point until 2005.
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