As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the contemporary era, the internet has been becoming very popular day by day.
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, some people want to have news in
paper
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,
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it more concerns feelings, which can be given by reading a classical sort of paper. It is widely agreed that
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it is
the
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only a matter of time
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when
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newspapers will become an occasion in people's life, which I am going to explain
further
. First and foremost, in today's world adults and young population prefer finding information in their modern gadgets
due to
its convenience. It is absolutely suitable to find
such
information as sports news, job offers or to be interested in political events by taking cutting-edge
smartphone
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as well as
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. There is no need to go outside
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if someone
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to be well-informed.
Moreover
, many up-to-date newspapers are published not only in
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format
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but
also
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. Having said that, papers are less popular in modern society, especially in
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the teenager's
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teenager's
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population. It is much
more
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simplier
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simpler
to "google" information
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than to go out and buy
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a newspaper
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newspaper
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. In some countries, like the UK, it is the tradition to read the Guardian in the tube, which is mostly
preffered
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preferred
by elderly people. It gives them some warm memories
about
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the past, where it was the only possible way to
now
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something new. In conclusion, there is a widespread belief that, in the
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future classical newspapers would only exist as a historical event in museums
due to
the advances in technology and non-stop technical progress.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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