The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade -labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade -labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The lower tables provide figures
of
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Fairtrade
sales
of
bananas
and coffee for 5
countries
in Europe in 1999 and 2004. In general, we can see from the data that the
UK
and
Switzerland
had advanced
sales
for both products by 2004, in comparison with the other 3
countries
.
For instance
, in 1999, the
sales
of coffee were relatively equal for all
countries
.
In particular
, for the
UK
and
Denmark
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Denmark,
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the figures were 1.5 and 1.8
millions
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respectively,
whereas
, for Belgium and Sweden the marks did not reach
to
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even 2
millions
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of
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euros. Meanwhile, in 2004 the pattern appears to be slightly different. Namely, there was a significant rise in the
sales
of coffee
for
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the
UK
and
Switzerland
. The
sales
amount increased more than ten times for the
UK
,
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and doubled for
Switzerland
. In 1999,
Switzerland
had the highest
sales
volume for
bananas
(15 mln euros),
by contrast
with
other
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four
countries
,
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did not pass over 2
millions
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million
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. In 2004,
Switzerland
remained the biggest consumer of
bananas
(47 mln euros), with all four other
countries
spending much less on them.
However
, there
were
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a noticeable jump in the consumption of
bananas
for
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the
UK
and Belgium,
while
the figures for Sweden and Denmark decreased slightly.
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