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Damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of the improvement in the standard of living. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial perspective heating a debate over it is argued that the improvement in the standard of living of people is one of the major causes of damaging the
environment
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 thinking is valid to a certain extent, I partially agree with the idea. Without a shadow of a doubt, the cons of the habitat
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 harmful effects on the dweller’s life.
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, the widespread use of fuel-powered vehicles, especially automobiles leads to a direct influence on air pollution.
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 the rocketing rate of car ownership among mild-income Vietnam traditionally, renders the atmosphere in major cities alarming contaminated, particularly during peak hours in major urban areas . From my perspective, the
environment
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 plays a paramount imperative role in the standard of living of inhabitants.
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, consumption of conventional energy and consumer goods are the main culprits behind major environmental issues. Because human
produces
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 hundreds of millions of tons of plastic annually, most of which is able to decay naturally. As more and more people demand
for
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plastic bags with a view to providing us propose.
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, with the increase in the use of plastic bags, there has been discharged into habitat which is harmful not only to the
environment
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 but
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 to humans. In conclusion, the
environment
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 is taken into consideration by residents.
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, in order to ensure a sustainable lifestyle for humans, we are led towards an eco-friendly lifestyle. It is time for people to change their way of taking prompt action towards the problems.

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task achievement
Strive to fully address the prompt by providing a more balanced argument that discusses both sides of the issue and reaches a clear conclusion. Keep the essay on topic and make sure to directly answer the question of to what extent you agree or disagree with the statement.
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