is live now is better than in the past? what do you think?
There is no doubt that these days many
people
ask about which better life now or in the past. This
essay will argue that live
now is better than in the past, because many things like Replace the word
life
transportations
, education, and health Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
which
are better and easier now than in the past.
There are many ideas about Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
question one of these ideas is that live
now Replace the word
life
became
extremely modern Wrong verb form
become
that
Correct word choice
which
what
made many things easy to use. Correct your spelling
has
For example
, transports
now easier to use than in the past, to illustrate Correct subject-verb agreement
transport
this
point, now if you have something very necessary and it is far, then
you can use the car which take
about 10 minutes to arrive. Change the verb form
takes
While
the transports
in the past was very difficult. Fix the agreement mistake
transport
For example
, when you have an important appointment, and it is 10 miles from you then
you will need
get ‘about an hour to arrive.
Add the particle
need to
On the other hand
, many people
argue that life in the past was clearer than now. The main reason given to support this
point is that in the past there were not any oil, pandemic, or nuclear wars which causes
many things for Wrong verb form
caused
people
or for animals. To illustrate, now a
pollution is one of the riskiest factors which cause cancer and other diseases for Remove the article
apply
people
.
In conclusion, this
essay has argued that live
now is better than in the past, because now we have many factors to make our planet better and more modern than in the past. Replace the word
life
Moreover
, one of these factors is oil. Which is developed many
countries by Change preposition
in many
make
Change the verb form
making
airplane
, cars, and many important machines like medical machines.Fix the agreement mistake
airplanes
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