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The diagram details the process of making clothes from plastic bottles.

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The provided diagram depicts how the production of clothes is done from recyclable plastic bottles.
Overall
, the entire process involves 13 steps in total until the final product, clothes, is produced. First of all,
the
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plastic bottles are being collected and transported to factories where these are being sorted per size.
Thereafter
, a cutting mechanism is used in order to cut the sorted bottles into tiny pieces which will be gone through the washing machine to clean these pieces. The following will be to let the cut plastics dry under the natural sunlight for 10 whole hours. Now is
time
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 to boil the tiny plastics turning
into
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them into
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 liquid form which will
then
 be strained by using automated machines and made into yarn. As
these
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this
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 yarn needs to be kept neatly, a weaving machine is used to roll
up
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them up
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 for
save
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keeping
that
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which
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 in turn will be utilized to produce clothing.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure clarity in the description of each step of the process, avoiding ambiguous phrases.
task achievement
Include an introductory sentence that clearly outlines the main stages of the process.

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