In some countries, children under 16 years old are not allowed to leave school by law and get full-time work . Is this a good or bad thing ? Discuss your opinion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
Recycling is a controversial topic. Some advocates argue that not enough of the rubbish from homes is recycled. Also, they say that the only covenant solution to tackle this problem is for the government to step forward and make it a legal requirement. I personally hold the view that they can put a tax on the amount of each home and give funds as a punishment to those who are not paying attention to this rule.
Everyone think when it comes to landing a good job, there is an ongoing debate on whether getting a unversity degree or gaining a practicical skill is more vital. This essay, will provide two sides of my opinion that people can mix both unversity education and develeping soft skills is te best for getting a good job.
I am writing to you because I have problems with the parking area which we have used together for a long time. Last week, I noticed that some cars have been parked here for many months. This makes a parking place unavailable for people who need to use this area. Moreover, Someday there are noise sounds which disturb another one.
Nowadays, there are various debates about where and how the government should spend money. Some people believe that art is important for any society, so authorities should consider it when they want to allocate a budget, but on the contrary, other think public health and education are more essential for population.
Various species of animals are employed to fulfil human needs such as food, transportation, and research. Many individuals argue against it and believe that animals should have equal rights as humans, and should not be exploited; while others advocate that it is okay to use animals for our benefit. This essay discusses both viewpoints, however, I strongly concur with the group that believes animals should be treated with kindness.