In some countries, children under 16 years old are not allowed to leave school by law and get full-time work . Is this a good or bad thing ? Discuss your opinion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
In modern times, an immense number of people believe that voluntary work should be a mandatory part of the high school curriculum and that it is beneficial for both students and society. I completely agree with this statement, and in this essay, I will discuss the reasons for this and provide examples to support my viewpoint.
There is a reduction in the number of species including animals and plants in numerous countries. The reason would be excessive usage and contamination in the environment. These causes need to be solved to save these creatures.
I hope this letter finds you in great health! With blended feelings of both happiness and sadness, I need to tell you that I will need to postpone my visit to meet you as the much-awaited marriage for my sister has finally been fixed during the second half of the November month. As you know, Indian marriages traditions are given the utmost importance, being her only real sibling- I need to be present during all the occasions and ceremonies.
In Thailand, people consider teachers as role models for students. Not only do they have to teach knowledge to children, but they also teach other things such as manners and have to care for them like their own children. However, some argue that this kind of responsibility is too much for them. This essay will discuss both sides of the role of this job.
Working issues arising from employees doing jobs that they don’t specialize in or are truly willing to do causes great concern in many countries. Many regions across the world face this problem as the lack of proper support for the educational system from the government. This essay will discuss why this might be the case and what are the significant results from this circumstance.