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The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram gives information about the
life
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 cycle of a
salmon
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, from egg to adult fish.
Overall
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, the development of the
life
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 of a
salmon
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 will move in three different areas: river, estuary and ocean. It is
also
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 noticeable that there are some main stages in the
life
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 cycle of
salmon
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, from egg to mature fish. A deep analysis of the diagram provided reveals in the first stage the mature
salmon
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 will lay eggs and incubate until the egg emerges in the river and in the next stage it will be rearing in freshwater. It can be seen from the diagram that after freshwater rearing, a
salmon
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 will be rearing in the estuary environment and the next stage
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 will migrate to rearing areas for growth and maturation.
In addition
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, when the
salmon
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 mature it will migrate from the ocean to spawning areas in the river to continue the
life
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 cycle.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, salmon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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