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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned hime, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter Say where you think you left the papers Explain why they are so important Tell the manager what you want him/her to do

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Dear Manager, I am writing
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 in regard to the
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 that I unfortunately left in your hotel. On 26th December, I came to Hyderabad to attend
the
Correct article usage
a

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 business meeting and planned to stay in your hotel .Since, I am carrying important
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 I enquired if the management can provide me
a
Add the preposition
with a

It appears that you are missing a preposition with the verb provide. Consider adding the preposition.

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safe locker,based on my conditions they allocated my 409 as it has
additional
Correct article usage
an additional

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 security box. On the next day,I left the hotel a little early to board the earliest train to Delhi.After reaching the office I noticed that the
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 were missing and
then
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 realised that they
are
Wrong verb form
were

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb are. Consider changing it.

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 still in the same safe box.The
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 are extremely important for me because it has security details related to my upcoming project. Can you please find the
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 in the respective room and courier them to the designated address '325 Adhan building,Delhi'
.
Change the punctuation
?

The punctuation mark may be incorrect here. Consider changing it.

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 Will be waiting for your reply. Yours Sincerely, Vikram Kallem.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea and that the main ideas are not blurred together. Paragraphs should be well-developed and focused.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of linking words to better connect sentences and paragraphs, and to guide the reader through your arguments and statements.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task given, providing necessary details and explanations where appropriate to fulfill the task requirements completely.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. Avoid any informal language when writing in a formal context, and ensure that the courtesy and formality are appropriate for the situation.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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