The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
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The line graph illustrates data about fast food which was consumed by the UK population over 20 years periods, between 1970 and 1990. Units are measured in
grams
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per week.
Overall
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, the spending amount for fish and
chips
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and hamburgers increased dramatically
while
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the
consumption
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of pizza stayed in the same
range
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of 300 and 200
grams
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, respectively over the given time zone. In 1990, fish and
chips
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consumption
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peaked at 500
grams
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while
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the other 2 consumer goods stayed in the same
range
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. On the one hand, Both hamburgers and fish&
chips
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start in the same
range
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and go up slightly in 1980. During
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10-year period,
such
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as in 1980 and 1990, the Fish& and
chips
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consumption
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figure rose dramatically to about 350
grams
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per week, rather than the spending by UK people on hamburgers. In 1990, fish&
chips
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consumed 2 times more than hamburger by UK people in 1990.
On the other hand
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, pizza spending fluctuated in the
range
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such
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as 300 and 200
grams
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per week over a given 20-year period. Following
this
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, the
Consumption
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amount for pizza accounted for a slight decrease from 1970 to 1980 and afterwards stayed in the same amount of line over another 10-year period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, chips, consumption, range with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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