Some People think that men museums should be enjoyable places to entertain Poople, while others belive that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays,
museums
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have become of great importance and demand
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among
government and
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, and the ideas and works of
museums
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have developed
people
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have different views about the role and function of
museums
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. In my opinion,
museums
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can and should be both entertaining and educational. In the first opinion, it can be argued that the main role of a museum is to entertain.
Museums
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are tourist attractions, and their aim is to exhibit a collection of interesting objects that many
people
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want to see. The average visitor may become bored if he or she has to read or listen
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much educational
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, so
museums
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often put
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interesting
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and enjoyment rather than learning.
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type of
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museum
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is designed to be visually
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spectacular
, and it may
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interactive or even games as part of its exhibitions.
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, Some
people
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argue that
museums
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should focus on education. The aim of an exhibition should be to teach visitors something that they did not previously know.
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means, that the history behind the museum's exhibits
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to be explained, and
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can be done in various ways. Some
museums
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employ professional guides to talk to their visitors,
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other
museums
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offer headsets so that the visitors can listen to detailed information
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about
the exhibition,
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way,
museums
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can play an important role in teaching
people
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about history, cultures, science and many other aspects of life. In conclusion, it
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to me that good
museums
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should be able to offer an interesting, enjoyable and
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educational
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educational
experience so that that
people
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can both have fun and learn something at the same time.
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Address all parts of the task, ensuring that your opinion is clear throughout the essay. Provide a balanced discussion of both views, and support your main points with relevant, specific examples that illustrate your arguments.

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