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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
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The line chart illustrates the
consumption
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 of fast food in the United Kingdom from 1970 to 1990. The data has been calibrated in terms of
grams
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.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the
consumption
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 of hamburgers, fish and chips showed an upward trend except for pizza which followed a downward trend in the
last
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 year.
According to
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 the given data, in 1970 UK residents consumed 300
grams
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pizzas
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of pizzas
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 per week which was the highest
consumption
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 as compared with others. Meanwhile, the figure shows a slight fall of nearly 100
grams
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 in 1980. Afterwards, in 1990 a significant rise of 20
grams
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 was illustrated in the
consumption
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 of pizzas in the United Kingdom. Moving
further
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, UK citizens bought almost 98
grams
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 of fish and chips in the initial year,
while
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 hamburgers were just 30
grams
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.
Furthermore
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, both the items showed an increment of nearly 150
grams
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 and 70
grams
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 in 1980 respectively.
However
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, the
consumption
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 of fish and chips followed an upward trend from 1985 to 1990.
Also
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, in 1985 the figure for hamburgers showed a sharp rise of almost 299
grams
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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