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Band 4

It is believed that, the major proportion of goverment budget sould be divided to health education and safety facilities.

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It is believed that
,
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 the major proportion of
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 budget
sould
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should
could
 be divided
to
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into
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health
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 education and safety facilities.
Although
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,
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 there are
have
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some discussable
points
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, in my view, I agree that
main
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the main
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 resources of
state
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the state
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 budget spread out
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an acknowledment
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acknowledment
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acknowledgement
 of
health
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 and the main specific
points
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 related
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to preventation
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preventation
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prevention
presentation
 issues.
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, there
some
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points
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 that I disagree
such
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divided
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 the main resource to
health
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knowledge
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 .
In
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Nowdays
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, have
negative
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 tendency in
worldvide related
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world-vide-related
illness
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 and education. Most of
country
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the country
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 do not
provided
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provide
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 all
type
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types
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 of safety and
health
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 equipment.
Due to
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this
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 fact,
any
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no
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 tools or equipment have been provided by
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goverment instutions
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government institutions
.
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,
Covid-19
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the Covid-19
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 pandemic was spread out speadly and nobody had
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knowledge
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the knowledge
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 and technique to
prevet
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prevent
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this
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illness
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 in
this
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 case
knowledge
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 about
virus
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the virus
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 is not prevent us from
this
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 pandemic. In
despite
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 of
this
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 fact,
acknowledge
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in
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apply
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health
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 and
used to
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using
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 some technique is
noticable
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noticeable
points
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 for people.
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Goverment
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Government
 should
to
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give
knowledge
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 and ability related
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this
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to this
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 topic for citizenship which it be helpful and important for all
side
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sides
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 of human life.
This
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 education
have begin
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 in
school
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the school
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 years because
child
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children
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 and teenagers have moderately low immun
system
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systems
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 and
level
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their level
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 of
ilness
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illness
 is much
more
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higher
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 than
adult
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adults
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.
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, in Turkiye,
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goverment instutions
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government institutions
 are partaking
some
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in some
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compaign
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campaigns
 about
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a healty
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healty
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healthy
 life and
give
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noticable
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noticeable
 information
actual
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about actual
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illness
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illnesses
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. In conclusion, I strongly agree that,
major
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 part of the state resources
divided
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 not only
improving
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by improving
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level
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the level
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 of quality of hospitals, but
also
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add
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by adding
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 value to people about
preventation
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prevention
from
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of
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illness
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 and
unsafety
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an unsafety
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enviroment
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environment
.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that you have a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each part should clearly serve its purpose: the introduction to present the topic, the body to provide arguments and examples, and the conclusion to summarize the essay.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating a logical flow within your essay. Your paragraphs should follow a clear sequence, and the ideas within them should be ordered logically.
coherence cohesion
Develop your main points by providing clear, relevant examples and evidence. This will help strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing.
task achievement
Address the task directly and ensure that you provide a full response to all parts of the question. Your essay should remain focused on the topic throughout.
task achievement
Work on articulating your ideas more clearly and comprehensively. This includes proper structuring of sentences and clarity in presenting your viewpoints.
task achievement
Incorporate specific examples that are directly related to the topic to support your ideas. These should be drawn from credible sources or personal experiences.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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