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The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?

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Nowadays, some social
media
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 apps are become more popular
tool
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 among people to express their disappointments and grumbles in public. There are some repercussions as increasing a lot of spurious information and
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 society to show violence.
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,
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 trend has
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 more advantages
such
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 as having more flexibility in virtual reality and the most effective way to induce others.
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 with, the main consequence of using social
media
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 is people can publish unknown information about everything.
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, folks can post everything on Instagram or Facebook without checking the source.
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, it would
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cause numerous issues in society
which
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related to violence by online
commentors
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commentators
commenters
.
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, when people write
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 about one actor or well-known person, all haters
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 posting and commenting with
badly
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 words,
it
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 leads to
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 that the actor can
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 his popularity.
On the other hand
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, there are several benefits of online platforms like giving freedom and more opportunity for our life. To
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, all social
media
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 allows us to show things which we want and communicate with foreigners.
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, it would be more helpful
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 individuals to vent their opinions and frustrations without meeting or
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 face to face.
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, some problems associated with bad services in restaurants and shops can solved by affecting bloggers who
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 a lot of followers.
The internet
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Internet
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 bloggers
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significant
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 influence
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community
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.
To sum up
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, online
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 have made our life more easier
with
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by
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 avoiding conflicts in public
place
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places
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.
Additionally
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, we can just post about our displeasure to urge others and help companies do improvement on their services.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accountability
  • Public venting
  • Reputation management
  • Social media platform
  • Complaining culture
  • Community solidarity
  • Conflict resolution
  • Entitlement
  • Direct communication
  • Customer service
  • Exposure
  • Misinformation
  • Amplification
  • Systemic issues
  • Constructive feedback
  • Online atmosphere
  • Negative content
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