The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
The bar chart illustrates
the
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information about countries,which
exports
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pineapple
in two given years,2009 and 2019,
while
pie
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the pie
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chart shows how the price
of
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per
pineapple
was
establsihed
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established
.
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, the amount of
pineapple
produced in
a
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country A in one year was the highest
than
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in
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other regions in two given years.
Also
, most of the payment is for
distrubution
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distribution
and retailing. Country C was
the
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on
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at
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the bottom of the list between
statess
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states
in 2009 and 2019, with figures of under 1
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes, considering that it has seen
small
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rise in
second
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year.
Whereas
, exports from Country B decreased from over
a
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4
millions
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of
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tones
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to under 2
milliones
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millions
million
of tonnes in 2009 and 2019, respectively.The
dramatically
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growth of
pineapple
exports has
noticed
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in
A
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region. In 2009
this
fraction was under 1% ,after a decade
this
trend was
equally
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to more than 20
millions
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million
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of
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pineapple
. It can
bee
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seen that 35% of the price is for retailing.
While
16% and 18% of the payment is taxes and profit, respectively.
Consumer
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Consumers
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pay for import licences 10% and 2% more for international
ttransport
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transport
.A mere 5% goes for producers and expert costs and export costs
accounts
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for only 4% of the price.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • dominant
  • emerging trends
  • production costs
  • transportation
  • retailer markup
  • global trade dynamics
  • sustainability
  • market demand
  • economic factors
  • export volumes
  • logistic costs
  • retail price
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