The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
These pie charts illustrate data on resources on both expenditure and consumption worldwide. It is clear from the pie chart that the United States and the European countries are represented more than half of the
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about 60 Change preposition
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According to
what is shown, most of the world
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Asia which is considered by about 57 Correct article usage
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Europe exhibit a similar population at 14 Correct article usage
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Africa and the rest of the Correct article usage
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world
are represented at 10% and 5%, respectively. On the other hand
, the majority spending
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whereas
, the transport, housing, and clothing are showing
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Transport is represented at three times the amount of clothing at 18%, Change preposition
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while
housing is represented at twice the proportion of clothing at 12%. Clothing itself represents 6%, while
the rest of the proportion goes to other categories, amounting to 40%.
To sum up
, we could say that, the lowest world
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while
the smallest number of expenditure was for buying cloth.Submitted by abdullazizalajlan.m on
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