The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.

The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
These pie charts illustrate data on resources on both expenditure and consumption worldwide. It is clear from the pie chart that the United States and the European countries are represented more than half of the
world
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consumption
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about 60
percent
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.
According to
what is shown, most of the
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population goes to
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Asia which is considered by about 57
percent
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. The proportion for both the US and
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Europe exhibit a similar population at 14
percent
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,
while
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Africa and the rest of the
world
are represented at 10% and 5%, respectively.
On the other hand
, the majority
spending
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goes
to
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on
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the
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food
by
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about 24%
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whereas
, the transport, housing, and clothing
are showing
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the same increase pattern,
including
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Transport is represented at three times the amount of clothing at 18%,
while
housing is represented at twice the proportion of clothing at 12%. Clothing itself represents 6%,
while
the rest of the proportion goes to other categories, amounting to 40%.
To sum up
, we could say that, the lowest
world
population were for
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Africa
while
the smallest number of expenditure was for buying cloth.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words world with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • data
  • spending habits
  • consumption
  • resources
  • population distribution
  • comparison
  • patterns
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • implications
  • disparities
  • environmental consequences
  • social impacts
  • sustainability
  • economic development
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