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The bar chart shows men's and women's prize money at golf majors in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows men's and women's prize money at golf majors in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares the amount of
prize
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money
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 won by
men
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 and
women
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 at various golfing
competitions
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 in 2010.
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,
men
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 tended to earn substantially more
money
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 than
women
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 in each of the
competitions
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 where both sexes participated. In the
two
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women
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-only
competitions
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, the average
prize
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money
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 was
also
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 considerably lower than the one in which only
men
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 competed.
According to
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 the bar chart, in the ANA and Evian Championship majors, which were open only to
women
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, winnings were under $500,000.
In contrast
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,
prize
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money
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 for the
men
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-only Masters golf major was nearly
two
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 million dollars. In the three championships in which both
men
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 and
women
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 compete, the US Open, the Open Champ, and the PGA, there was a strikingly similar trend. Male winnings were almost triple those of female earnings in
two
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 of them,
while
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 in the US
Open
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 they were double. Female
prize
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money
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 fell between $500,000 and $800,000,
whereas
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men
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's winner earnings began at just under
two
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 million dollars, with the US Open winnings, the most lucrative of the
competitions
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, higher than that.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prize, money, men, women, competitions, two with synonyms.
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