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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale, while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In the modern
world
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world,
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 there are ecological problems. People should decide these things.
However
, who should solve these issues? Experts, scientists and the public seem to have been discussing
this
 occasion for a long time. Some will agree with the statement,
whereas
 there are opponents of
this
 view. My opinion will be given and both sides will be discussed. On the one hand,
environment
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environmental
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 troubles concern every country, which is why deciding
such
 questions on a global level is the most effective way to save our
nature
.
Moreover
, If every country unites, the state of
nature
 will improve.
On the other hand
, sometimes, the population may not support solving challenges on a worldwide level, because people tend to think
this
 problem will not affect them. Others suppose is the most perfect way to deal
ecological
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with ecological
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 issues on a national scale. To resolve
such
 problems step by step is a
wisely
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wise
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 solution.
For instance
, the governments should issue laws on the protection of
nature
.
In addition
, every person can help animals,
sort
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and sort
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 and collect garbage. If society
follow
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follows
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 these rules, it will lead to
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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 quality of
environment
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the environment
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. All things considered, the obvious conclusion to be drawn is that not make sense which method will be chosen. In general, the public needs
understand
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to understand
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 the significance of
nature
 and fight
with
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apply
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different environmental problems together.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction directly addresses the topic and provides a clear thesis statement outlining the scope of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Develop main points more thoroughly with specific examples and clear explanations to support the arguments on both sides.
coherence cohesion
Use more complex sentence structures and a wider range of vocabulary to demonstrate language proficiency.
task achievement
Maintain a clear position throughout the response. It's important to state your opinion clearly and consistently, particularly in the conclusion.
task achievement
In the conclusion, reiterate your view convincingly, summarizing the key points discussed without introducing new information.
task achievement
Provide a balanced discussion for both views with well-developed arguments before clearly stating your opinion.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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