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The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Fuel type used to generate electricity (%)

The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Fuel type used to generate electricity (%)
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The provided table chart illustrates the
propotion
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proportion
 utilisation of five categories to produce electricity in five nations in 2005.
Overall
, coal and lignite are mostly used in Singapore and Malaysia,
while
energy
 in Japan is generally sustained by nuclear fuels. The lowest fuel in use among the given in all countries except Thailand is
petroleum
 products.
While data
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Data
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Firstly
, for coal and lignite in Singapore and Malaysia, each 61% and 42% respectively.
Secondly
, the highest utilisation of nuclear
energy
 was
Japan
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in Japan
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 and South Korea, each 49% and 33% respectively.
Thirdly
, natural elements
consumed
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are consumed
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 mostly in South Korea 48%.
On the other hand
, Thailand
which
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apply
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did not generate
energy
 from
this
 source at all except
petroleum
 products and other sources of
energy
.
In addition
, Thailand made
energy
 from
petroleum
 36% and other sources 42%.
Lastly
, Malaysia, Singapore, South Korea and Japan
consumed
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consume
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energy
 from
petroleum
 products less than 5%.
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