The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Fuel type used to generate electricity (%)

The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Fuel type used to generate electricity (%)
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The provided table chart illustrates the
propotion
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proportion
utilisation of five categories to produce electricity in five nations in 2005.
Overall
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, coal and lignite are mostly used in Singapore and Malaysia,
while
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energy
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in Japan is generally sustained by nuclear fuels. The lowest fuel in use among the given in all countries except Thailand is
petroleum
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products.
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While data
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Data
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suggest a preference,
Firstly
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, for coal and lignite in Singapore and Malaysia, each 61% and 42% respectively.
Secondly
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, the highest utilisation of nuclear
energy
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was
Japan
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in Japan
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and South Korea, each 49% and 33% respectively.
Thirdly
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, natural elements
consumed
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mostly in South Korea 48%.
On the other hand
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, Thailand
which
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apply
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did not generate
energy
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from
this
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source at all except
petroleum
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products and other sources of
energy
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.
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, Thailand made
energy
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from
petroleum
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36% and other sources 42%.
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, Malaysia, Singapore, South Korea and Japan
consumed
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energy
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from
petroleum
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products less than 5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, petroleum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • dominant
  • reliance
  • predominantly
  • notable contrast
  • diversity
  • energy mix
  • resource availability
  • economic consideration
  • government policy
  • energy generation
  • percentage
  • fuel types
  • electricity production
  • comparative analysis
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