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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates the information about the
number
 of people
travel
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travelling
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 to five different places between 1990 and 2005. The figures are given in
million
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millions
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.
Oveall
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Overall
 it can be seen
form
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from
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 the table that,
every
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in every
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periods
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period
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 in
the
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apply
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question, the
number
 of
traveling
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travelling
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 to Europe always led
other
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to other
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 places.
Moreover
, the
number
 of
tourist
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tourists
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 increase every 5 years. In 1990, the highest
number
 of people is visiting
to
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apply
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Europe with 280.2
million
, followed by America and Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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, with the figures
are
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apply
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being 80.5 and 60.2
million
 respectively. The total
number
 of people who went for travel rose
form
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from
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 448.9
million
 to 693.7
million
 in 2005.
For traveling
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Traveling
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 to America which
is
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was
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 the second
popular
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most popular
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 in 1990
continued
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continued to
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 grow to the highest
number
 at 118.2
million
 in 2000 before
decline
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declining
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 minimally to 113.2 in
next
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the next
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 five
year
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years
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 and was exceeded by traveling to Asia and
th
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the
pacific
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Pacific
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. The
number
 of visiting other places
are
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is
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 the same trend that
increase
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is increasing
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 steadily except
America
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in America
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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