The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
quantity
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number
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of
shops
closed and the ones opened for a seven-
year
period
since 2011 in one country. During
this
period
, openings experienced
sharp
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a sharp
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decline
while
closures witnessed a slight reduction. Commencing at
significant
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a significant
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rate of 8500 new
shops
joining (highest amount ever) and 6400 leaving the market chain in 2011, in the following
year
, closure rates eclipsed that of
opennings
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openings
. Seeing a sharp reduction to almost 4000
openned
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open
shops
, the trend witnessed a linearly mild climb for a two-
year
period
up to 6100
stores
in 2014. On the flip side, closures witnessed mild fluctuations for the first three years, reaching close to
oppenings
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openings
in 2014. Since 2014, closed
shops
established the lowest rate ever by only 500 added
stores
, regaining 5000 newly closed
shops
by the following
year
, it remained almost constant with negligible fluctuations until the end of the
period
.
On the other hand
, opened
stores
saw a mild reduction since 2014, overshadowing that of openings,
leveled
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levelled
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off at 4000
stores
per
year
for two consecutive years up to 2017.
However
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during the
last
year
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year,
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it experienced a moderate decline to be finished at 3000
stores
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, period, year, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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