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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now , and how it will look after redevelopment .

#plans #show #layout #university #sports #centre #redevelopment
The maps illustrate
future
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the future
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 development of
university's
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the university's
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sport
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sports
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 centre as
campared
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compared
 present .
Overall
 , it can be seen that now university
sport
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sports
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 establishment is quite undevelopment now but in the future
area
 will
have been
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 more industrial.
According to
 the maps , there will just two places will have remained constantly in the future plan
while
outodoor
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outdoor
 courts will have destroyed to make room for
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the laisure
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laisure
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leisure
 pool on the left of the map.Another striking change ,
changing
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the changing
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 room and sports shop may
will have
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be
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 constructed
opposite
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on opposite
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side
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sides
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 of the laisure pool or
on
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at
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 the bottom of the map respectively .
Moreover
 , outdoor courts which will
have
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be
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situated in front of
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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, will
have
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be
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knocked down in order to
built
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build
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Sports
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a Sports
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 hall
north east
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northeast
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 of the
area
. Another notable modification
,Dance
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the dance
 studio will going to get constructed in the north-east of
port
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the port
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 of the
area
.
Cafe
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The cafe
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structure will
also
have
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be
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 built so that
expansion
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the expansion
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 of
residential
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the residential
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area
 on the south of the map
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks clear logical structure and paragraphing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are not clearly defined or are missing, which is required to frame the report effectively.
coherence cohesion
While some description of changes is provided, there's a need for improved clarity in supporting the main points with specific details.
task achievement
The task is not fully completed as some information is missing or unclear, and the description of the proposed changes is not comprehensive.
task achievement
The ideas expressed are unclear and confusing at times, which makes it challenging to understand the overall intentions of the redevelopment plan.
task achievement
Although there are some examples provided, more specific details and examples about the changes to the layout are needed to effectively support the description.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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