The three pie charts illustrate how many hours spent in a library by undergraduate and postgraduates compared to the total student population at a university in Britain.

The three pie charts illustrate how many hours spent in a library by undergraduate and postgraduates compared to the total student population at a university in Britain.
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pie charts illustrate how many hours are read weekly by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to other
students
in a British university library
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the
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literally half of postgraduates don’t
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time in a library per week in comparison with the undergraduates The figures were 51 per
cent
and nine per
cent
respectively
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only 5 per
cent
of undergraduates read between one and five hours in a British university library ,
whereas
the average for
postgraduate
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postgraduates
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in another category is a hefty
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per
cent
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for total
students
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the pattern appears to be slightly different
It is clear that
those
students
who aren’t researching for postgraduate read a little bit
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either junior lecturers
of
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other
students
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • undergraduate
  • postgraduate
  • time brackets
  • library usage
  • total student population
  • correlation
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • study level
  • time spent
  • academic demands
  • research intensity
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