The three pie charts illustrate how many hours spent in a library by undergraduate and postgraduates compared to the total student population at a university in Britain.
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pie charts illustrate how many hours are read weekly by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to other Correct your spelling
three
students
in a British university library
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literally half of postgraduates don’t Correct article usage
apply
spent
time in a library per week in comparison with the undergraduates
The figures were 51 per Change the verb form
spend
cent
and nine per Use synonyms
cent
respectively
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only 5 per Add a comma
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cent
of undergraduates read between one and five hours in a British university library , Use synonyms
whereas
the average for Linking Words
postgraduate
in another category is a hefty Fix the agreement mistake
postgraduates
fifty one
per Add a hyphen
fifty-one
cent
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Meanwhile
for total Add a comma
Meanwhile,
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students
the pattern appears to be slightly different
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students,
It is clear that
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students
who aren’t researching for postgraduate read a little bit Use synonyms
than
either junior lecturers Correct quantifier usage
more than
of
other Correct your spelling
or
students
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