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The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries

The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries
#water #usage #millions #meters #industries #countries
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The bar graph illustrates the amount of utilizing
water
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 during a year by different
type
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types
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 of industrial
field
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fields
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 (fuel, foods/beverages, machinery, metal, chemicals, paper and textiles) in some regions. The values
measured
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 by cubic meters.
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, it can be seen that the chemicals category
have
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most
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the most
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 use of
water
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 both for
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ground
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groundwater
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water
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 and public supply.
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, the amount of
water
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usage
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had
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 highest for
ground
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water
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 in all of the categories except
machinery
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the machinery
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 and foods sector. The enormous
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ground
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groundwater
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water
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 quantity was 430 million
while
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 the public supply
usage
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 was 240 million for
chemical
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the chemical
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 industry.
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Furthermore
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 the lowest rate was 10 million and
this
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utilizing
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is utilised
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 for fuel and textiles in public supply
usage
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area
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areas
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also
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 machinery for
ground
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water
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. The highest
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ground
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groundwater
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water
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usage
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except
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 chemical type in metal, paper, foods&drinks it was 240, 190 and 110 respectively. As can be seen, the fuel and textiles categories have
least
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 spending
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water
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, ground, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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