The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity if various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 an 1995. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two pie charts compare the data about the how popular of various leisures among European adults during 1985 and 1995 in percentage.

Overall

, there was a dramatic increase in enjoying digital

entertainments

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in those two years, with

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addition of computer gaming in 1995. Given that in total those entertainments contributed to 32% of the

overall

landscape in 1985, in 1995 they

represent

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57% of the

overall

proportion. At the same time, they allocated one-third of the time to chat with family and friends in both years. A significant shift was observed from having

conversation

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with family (18%)

over

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more talks with friends (26%). At the same time, dining out seemed to be a less preferable choice in 1995 than

1985

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in 1985

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, demonstrating a more than 10% drop from 23% to 8%

while

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also

decrease

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from 6% to 2%. In conclusion,

depite

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despite

watching TV

experienced

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a slight drop, it still took the lead among all other leisure activities.

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for

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talking with family members and eating out showed a more than 10% decrease comparatively.

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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.

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The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity if various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 an 1995. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Art Classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?